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Inspired by a sticker of a firemen carrying a child |
“You are such a good girl, Nyla,” Aiden says to
me as he drifts into sleep. We lay together on his bed in pure bliss. Golden
sunlight illuminates the room along with Aiden’s young, tender, crooked smile.
I snuggle up against his face. We’d just finished a long game of fetch, and I was
exhausted. It was time for Aiden’s naptime. It is part of our ritual for me to
come and guard him as he slept. It gave him a sense of security as he slept. So,
together we lay, his deep, sleepy breaths barely audible.
Then I smell it, a
dark, smoky smell. Something is wrong. I lift my golden, chestnut head and take
a deep breath. Hints of smoke are in the air. I hop off the bed and trot over
to the cracked open door. Right as I get there, a loud piercing sound awakens
Aiden. I begin barking hysterically and rush to comfort Aiden.
“Nyla! What’s
happening?” Aiden asks through tears. I try to nudge him out the door until I realize
there are billows of smoke coming in through it. I bark at Aiden and he seems
to understand to stay put. His small body crouches in the corner of the room,
clutching onto his planes, trains, and automobiles bed sheet.
I scamper out the
door trying to locate the origin of the smoke. Aiden’s room is at the end of a
hallway with three bedrooms. However, I can hardly pick out the other two
doorways through the dark clouds of smoke that fill the room. I try dragging
the door as closed to shut as I can get it. I don’t want the smoke filling
Aiden’s room. I crawl through the smoky hallway and to the staircase. I see
tall orange flames at the base of the stairs that are already beginning to
devour the bottom steps. I try and locate the parents. Anyone. I begin to bark
but smoke fills my lungs, silencing me.
Then I see her, the
angel of life, protector of the family, and maker of delicious foods: Aiden’s
mommy. I whine to try and catch her attention. I see her lift her head from
below. “Nyla! Get Aiden out the window! The firemen are on their way!” she
cries through tears. Am I the only one with a level head in this situation? I
follow her orders and head back to Aiden’s room.
Although I’ve tried
to keep it free of smoke, the air in the room is getting harder and harder to
breathe. “Nyla! You’re back!” Aiden whimpers. His face is red and puffy from
crying; his tear stained cheeks are a shade of rosy pink that is surely a mixture
of the heat and his sobs. I hop onto Aiden’s bed and then onto the dresser that
is right under his window. I begin banging on the window, attempting to break
it.
“Nyla! No! Stop! Don’t
break! Mommy doesn’t like when you break things!” Aiden commands. I bark at him
to get back, and with one final pound of my head, the window shatters. I claw
at the screen and the smoke begins to escape from the room. I hear the sound of
distant sirens, the sound of hope.
Quickly, I hop onto
the ground and begin to drag Aiden towards the window. There is more and more
smoke leaking into the room, making it harder and harder to see and breathe.
There is a loud crash from the stairwell and I hear a deep voice.
“The woman said they’d
be in the very last room.” I bark loudly, beckoning the firefighters into Aiden’s
room. “I hear the dog!” one voice shouts.
Two large men in
large suits come bursting through the door. They hustle over towards Aiden and
me. “The window. The window is open. One peaks out the window. Andrew is ready
outside.
The next minutes
seem long and agonizing as the firefighters work to get a sobbing Aiden out of
his room and into the firefighter’s hands outside. I can feel my breaths
weakening as I fight for air. I vaguely see Aiden being lifted out the window
and into someone else’s hands. “The dog! Get the dog!” I hear, but I know it’s
too late.
I’m being lifted out
the window, and I take my last breaths of fresh air, but there is already too
much smoke in my lungs. At least the boy is safe. I have done all I could…
I like the dog's voice as the narrator in this piece, as well as your use of dialogue. Dogs are so amazing--such selflessness and devotion to their people--and you captured that bravery and charm and quick-wittedness in your character. I'm so glad you found that firefighter sticker and that it inspired you to go in this direction. You have a knack for writing, for sure, and I look forward to seeing more.
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